Thread:Komodo Saurian/@comment-5755678-20130627200042/@comment-1814425-20130627235753

i personally think its too specific. Its almost like having a second levels page. I Would say that you should only have the bigger parts, e.g main characters births/deaths, the war, polis conference, d6 found, hunter visits vdnkh. Nothing too specific but enought to warrent the page. I would also try not to make it sound like your reading a story. for example where it says about the front-line section it should read "Artyom is captured by the nazis; suspected of being a red spy" then you would add another point saying "Artyom escapes the nazis with the aid of the rangers" Also try and bullet point them under what year, instead of having 2033 eg, 2033 eg, 2033 eg. Have 2033 -eg -eg -eg 2034 -eg -eg -eg 2035 -eg. Also sorry to keep going on, but should we differentiate between the books and game. For example Artyom is rescued from the nazis by rangers in the game, but in the book is rescued by the revolutionists. Perhaps two sections could exists, showing the different contexts, one book and one game